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Flight by ALEXACEDEATH Flight by ALEXACEDEATH
When all we dream of is flying, we look at the birds above...
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I honestly don't know much about bird anatomy and such so this will be difficult but here goes...

I notice the paper you used, Was this just a little sketch? If so my first comment makes more sense. Your pencil is too blunt. It's difficult to work the right details and tones into your work if you don't have a sharp pencil. It also helps you be more accurate about where you place your strokes.

The bird looks pretty good. You have a nice texture happening for the feathers but perhaps a reference would help improve the realism. A trick is to make the strokes follow the contours of the shape. this means that because the bird's head is "spherical" the lines could have curved over the surface and added more of a realism.

Probably another thing that let you down is the lack of light source. The whole image is shades of grey. You have no dark shadow and no light which would have helped the image read better. For instance you could have used those tones to emphasise what's bird and what's tree.

The tree is good. There's not much to say about trees. I like the texture of the bark. Though perhaps it's a little too uniform? Some bark could have been wider than others, And some branches could have started earlier or curved uniquely. Also I assume that's a flower on the bottom branch? It blends in with the leaves a bit. Use contrast to make things stand out.

All in all a good picture that could have been executed a little better. Still great work, keep it up.

As usual take my critiques with a grain of sand. (Also sorry for the star ratings... It's not a unique concept...?)
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Brumarthan Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
AH! I love how feathery it looks!
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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Thanks man! :D
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Kendra-candraw Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I posted some redlines and a suggestion for you here

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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Thanks! :)

P.s. Just for curiosity are the redlines because my deviation is in the WIP folder?
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Kendra-candraw Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Yes and no, I'll red line a finished piece as well so you can see what needs work for next time, but usually I'll red line a WIP so you can fix it while you're still working on it :)
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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Oh cool! :D It´s that some of my finished works got dropped into that folder by accident, I'm still trying to figure out how to move them! :D :D :D
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Kendra-candraw Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
lol which ones I can move them for you
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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
Oh thanks! They´re Scarecrow, flight, Queen mandy,and slam dunk,
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Kendra-candraw Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
They've been moved :)
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ALEXACEDEATH Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2013  Student Digital Artist
thanks a ton!
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